Learning Outcome 4: Peer Review: Be able to critique their own and others’ work by emphasizing global revision early in the writing process and local revision later in the process. This learning outcome is focused on the ability to critically read a peer’s project and make constructive suggestions for change, in addition to the ability to evaluate one’s own work and identify opportunities for specific improvement.
In the paragraphs that follow, I will describe my peer editing process using perspectives (ideas, claims) and the explanation of text’s relationship to them. In additional to local editing with signal phrases and in text citations, I also followed the writer’s thesis to the conclusion.
Although I have not done a lot of editing in my previous years of high school, I am glad that I got the chance to practice this incredibly important skill in my English class. In this exercise, we had to review and edit a peer’s draft of their paper, and in turn, a peer edited my own paper. In my editing, I tried to be as specific as possible, as I wanted to make clear suggestions that could be easily understood.
In reading this person’s paper, I found that they had formed a precise thesis that was easily discoverable and was supported throughout their paper. This claim was that “Though my first experience in patient care was not what I hoped it would be, it motivated me to become a dedicated and passionate medical professional in my future, which is how I believe every individual going into this field should be”. They followed this claim with a specific goal for how they thought that this could happen. In another part of the paper (#2), I explained how some of their word choice and sentence structure confused me and gave a suggestion on how it could make a little bit more sense for the reader. They had said “… change the outcome in which residents are treated”, and I suggested changing it to “change the outcome of how residents…”. Although this was a small change, I think that saying their sentence in a different way would make it much clearer for the reader to understand. Additionally, on some other pages (#3 & #4), I suggested things like changing the order of some sentences to make it flow more seamlessly, as well as a couple of transition sentences that I thought might make ideas fit better. The following images are from the paper that I edited.
As for my paper, someone else was tasked with providing editing notes on my writing as well. Although they did not have as quite detailed as my comments were, they were still helpful in the process of editing my own paper to prepare it for the final draft. Throughout my paper, they made comments on aspects such as word choice, explanations for ideas that I presented, and transitions phrases when going from paragraph to paragraph. They suggested things that I could add, such as “add some quote analysis” on a quote that I had presented which could benefit from a more detailed explanation.
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